Take a look and tell me what i could do to change it

“Yeah let’s get going.” So we headed out in our vehicles. Tyler in the lead of course cause he knew where we were going. I just followed him and on our way I was just thinking about ways that I would maneuver on the road at high speeds. We went down a couple winding roads took some unusual turns at different intersections but we finally went down one road that was covered by foliage that turned in to just a road enclosed on both sides by jagged cliffs that finally came to an opening and dropped down a little. The rocks continued on the left but on the right was the beach. But it wasn’t one of the many beaches that I had seen in the area; this one was clean and had no one walking on it. We turned right at a T-intersection went up an incline took a nice left bank and then came to the most spectacular thing I ever saw. We traveled down this straightaway that was lined with people and cars on both sides. People that looked about our age and probably as old as like twenty-five, some on the beach but most of them were up on the tarmac looking at or sitting around cars. Car after car after car, there had to be at least a hundred cars. Tyler backed into a spot, then I grabbed the one right next to him. As we both climbed out Tyler put on a black cowboy hat that looked like it was made with some sort of synthetic straw, while I just threw on my jacket and walked to the front of my car and looked around; at all the sights. You could hear waves crashing against the coast, the revving of car engines all around, people talking amongst each other in big groups. This was like the place to hang out it seemed. 
“How did you find this place?” I asked Tyler as he walked to the front of his truck.

“My brother Billy brought me out here for a couple of weeks.”

“Wait! He raced?!?”

“No he was just here for the social experience. He kinda got tired of it though too.”

“How can that be? This place is like over the top exquisite.”

“I don’t know. He just stopped going, but once I got my license I came up here and just chilled.”

*Vroom, Vroom* I looked over and saw a couple of cars getting started and being revved. “They’re about to start,” Tyler said over my shoulder as I watched four cars approach the white line. There was an array of cars, from the tough American Muscle cars, to the sleek more modified Tuners, I even saw a couple trucks and some low riders scattered around the lot. Finally the four cars were up at the line- it was 7:00 exactly- when the first red light on the light tree turned on. I watched as the cars sat there idling as another red light came on, then the third one. Next was a yellow light that meant Ready, then another yellow one the meant Set, then finally the Green light glowed bright for Go. Within a second those cars bolted off from the starting line and headed down to the first right turn. “Where do they go?” I asked Tyler.
“Oh right I forgot,” he went back to his truck and came out with a sheet of paper. “Here. That’s the map of the track.” I looked at it, the first part of the race was amongst the rocks and cliffs with a lot of jagged turns just like the area around it. Then the second half finally opened up and overlooked the ocean to the left while the cliffs were right there on the other side practically pushing the road closer and closer to the edge. There was a nice couple of hairpin turns a couple of inclines and then the finish line was up on what looked like to be a ridge. I turned around and saw that spot behind us I was up a good twenty feet, and there was people up there and what looked to be a shed with lights strung around it. It really was a great place to go and chill. By this time the cars that had been at the starting line were up at the ridge; while people were surrounding the winner as he approached the shed. Then simultaneously another group of cars revved up their engines and headed for the starting line. “So how long until I go?” I finally asked Tyler after carefully examining the course.

“You’re one of the last races.”

“How many races are there?”

“Depends on the night. Looks like three more then you’ll be up.”

I took a deep breath. “Ok, that’s good.” I looked around again to get another glimpse of the nightlife, but then I saw her. She had a nice built body, with gorgeous curves; it was Dawn; wearing a black tank top with a pink and black plaid top to cover it. Then a pair of nice skinny jeans to show off her feminine curves. Tyler must’ve saw me staring, “O yeah I forgot that she hangs here.”

“What do you mean?”
“She’s been coming down here longer than I have. Her sister races, she races, Heck! That whole family races.” By this point Dawn had seen me staring and give me a little nod of her head then she turned around and started talking again with the group of girls she was with. I turned back to Tyler and was greeted with a goofy smile. “Dude your face is all red.”

“Yeah I know,” I tipped my head down a little. “It happens almost everyday in English.”

“Well, shut my mouth and call me silver. You never told me that you liked her.”

“Isn’t it obvious Ty?”

“I’ve never noticed it.”

I looked at him and smiled, “Well that’s good.” I sighed, “But I don’t think she’s that into me.”

“Well maybe you could impress her with your driving skills.”

“How much longer till I’m up?”

“You’re next. Might want to get ready.” I headed towards my car, taking my jacket off. I opened the door and tossed it in the back seat and slowly slid into the drivers seat. I started up the car. *Vroom* “Here we go,” I said to myself as I inch out of my spot and onto the strip. I rolled my window down and pull up next to Tyler who was still standing in the spot that I left him. “Any advice.”

Making progress

So Sylus has just gone and raced for his first time against Cable who is the best. Sylus got second, but had a chance to beat Cable. Now Sylus is just chilling at the track and is going for some food and is about to run into Dawn, who he likes a lot. The only problem is, that Dawn really could care less.