Main Character: Sylus- 16 6ft tall slim healthy muscular, smart, intelligent. Fry cook at a local diner. Popular smooth not afraid to speak his mind determined. drives a 92 red chevy camaro.
Best Friend: Tyler- 16 5'5 small skinny roughneck redneck hill billy farm hand at family's farm. different and not popular. close friends with sylus since 1st grade. drives an orange H3T. truck makes up for his lack of body.
Supporting Male: Cable- 18 6'5 jacked big and rough "bad-ass" black hair keeps to himself. "King of the Racing Coast" kind and sweet. works at a local garage. cable is his nickname but no one knows his real name. been racing for 2 and a half years. drives a green and black 2013 boss 302 ford mustang.
Enemy: Jeff Chambers- 16 5'10 smug rich kid brat. gets everything from his fathers money. dad is a banker well dressed. drives a 2002 mazda rx-7 with body kit light blue and black
Main Female: Dawn- 16 5'8 brunette. in a racing family. somewhat of a tom boy but also a lady. isn't impressed by sylus and doesn't see him as a popular kid or that big of a thing. gets a waitressing job at the same diner. one of the better racers in the family. medium build but feminine figure.
Sister: Cali- 18 5'11 blonde oldest of the sisters close to cable but just as "friends" very motherly to her sisters. a fighter will stick up for herself hot headed.
Sisters: Michele & Caroline- 14 going o 15 5'6 1/2 the sassy twins. criticize people very easily. always looking for flaws in character, appearance and driving. identical brunette with blonde highlights. tiny stick figures.
Sisters all drive a 2006 dodge charger str8 thats black and pink. but they race a '70 dodge challenger purple
let me know what you think and give me any suggestions as to what to change or add
*All the characters sound interesting
ReplyDelete*Descriptive, but a little more to picture the characters easier
*Good on the Protagonists, and Antagonists, a story always needs that
*Seem thoughtful, and creative
*Like the names
*For future reference, make sure to stay on track in the story
*Make sure to explain why Sylus,and Jeff Chambers are enemies
*Also explain the characters deeply to make the story more interesting
You are doing great job. Might explain why Cali is motherly. (did they loose their mother?) Stylus and Cable might be a little competitive. Long known feud between Chevy and Ford owners
ReplyDeleteWhat do your characters eat for breakfast, what brand of toothpaste do they use, are they dog or cat people, do they wear socks with holes??? Questions like these and many more will really fill out your character sketch. Pretend you hang out with them on Saturday night, how would you know them if you closed your eyes and someone started talking. Once you can "hear" their voices, get started, they will evolve as you write.
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